Yoshiii343's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[Step in]

Thank God you're not a rapist. You could get in jail being one! (the term for someone who raps is a rapper)

- The beat in the intro is nice.
- That synth is way too loud. Try adding distortion rather than just increasing the volume.
- The melody at 1:44 is nice.
- I'm hearing a lot of ducking (the snare, notably) and clipping (the synths) in this track. Basically what that means is that your synths are loud. Very loud. Too loud. You get my point.

TL;DR
The track has a nice vibe, but you've got a lot of mixing problems.

jossospro responds:

story of my life.

[4L?]

Heyyyyyyyyy

- I feel like this track lacks a bassline. Or it has one, and it's buried deep in the lead synths.
- Throw in some sweeps or a crash cymbal during transitions. Makes the track sound less monotone.
- The drums are rly sad because they didn't get enough parts in the track. :(
- As for that "ey" vocal sample, try varying the rhythm every few beats or so.
- That outro feels too short. Try making it repeat one more time before ending it.

EnterPrize responds:

Ok!

[Fluxstyle - I fly away]

Hey man, you don't HAVE to upload every single track you make. If a certain track is being a pain in the ass, just put it off and work on it at a later date. And when I mean a later date, I mean whenever you feel like working on it. Don't force yourself.

Anyway...
- this track is more breakbeat than DnB...but they're more or less related so ignore this asdfasdfadf
- It's really soothing. And nice melodies, too. Sounds like something from The Sims 3.
- Try glitching that beat a bit more like you did earlier in the track. Don't over do it, though. Or you could try varying the beats slightly near the end (like removing the hats or kick).
- Give a few seconds worth of silence to let that last note ring a bit.

unknowngoth responds:

Wow, your review is surprisingly helpful. Like holy crap this is some constructive criticism right there man, damn.
As for the track itself, I really just couldn't work it out. I tried a million different melodies and instruments, and I just didn't get what I wanted to make. I still like the song, it's just a complete different song than what I wanted it to be.
As for your advice, I will certainly put that to good use. I'm glad someone can still see some points to improve, rather than just rage over it like me.

So yeah. Thanks man. You helped me out here. Glad you found it soothing (since I was kinda going for that) :D

[Swoon (etK Remix)]

Hey there.

- Nice intro, but those chords dropping in pitch goes to fast. Even if you want it to go that fast, don't make the build-up too long.
- What's up with that random ass vocal bit?
- The beat's messy as heckle. Like, it's glitching out terribly.
- The volume randomly ducks throughout the track.
- The break at 2:23 is really muddy.
- During those messy breaks, the vocal only bit sounds off.
- That outro is weird as hell.

etK responds:

I love weird outros :D
Thanks for the interesting review!

[Just some glitch-hop loop]

Yo.

- That buzz synth is really loud. Lower that volume.
- Try changing the rhythm pattern in the last measure.

...Yeah, I've got nothing else to nitpick. I'd tell ye more if it was longer.

Norato responds:

Yo.... just a test, not even have that project anymore :D

[Happy Times/Sad Times]

yoooooooooooooooo. Yeah, this isn't really DnB.

- dem drum samples sounds flimsy. Replace 'em with something that sounds...uh, harder. Or maybe even layer several drum samples.
- Make the hi hat play on every beat (16th notes, i believe is the proper term). The drums gotta sound energetic.
- I really love that melody.

MonkeyToast responds:

Haha, I should probably try making an actual DnB song sometime as well ^^
And thanks a lot for the critiques! I've started to put more time into drums as that's something I'm laking with at the moment.
Glad you enjoyed the melody, as that's something I often put a lot of time into :)

[I'm Centered]

Hello there!

- Woah there man, go easy on the volumes and shit. It's really loud.
- The drums (kick and snare, particularly) are panned too much to the left. Centre it a little. (a tad ironic don't you think?)
- During the drop, you'd might wanna let the wubs be more heard than the other synths.

Lone-X responds:

Thanks for the tips, I didn't really touch the panning on the drums though.

Peace and love,
Lone X

[Unreleased Mix - (Aero)]

@Valkery72 dis isn't yotube fagghkaf!!!!!!!!!!!!111!!!234566!!!

Anyway (really short reviews because I'm a fagghkaf myself):

Aluminium
- That's a weird lead. Acidic shit yo.
- Those recorded bits was a nice touch.

Sunset
- I used to have a duplo song named Sunset. i should eat shit
- I love those strings.

Electric Snow
- Those synths could use a volume boost. Or some mids, idk lol

Umbrella (ella...ella...ella)
- Feels like it's the 2000s again.

Dancing in Outer Space
- dat intro
- ...actually, what the heck (i expected a 90's electro-funk track gdi)

Ramsesesese D
- no comment (because i'm an idiot)

Dancing in Outer Space gets my pick.

AeroMusic responds:

haha I thought that at first but I think he just likes the first one best :P

1. wasn't too sure about the recorded bits, wanted it to sound like a radio changing frequencies - but glad people liked it

2. they're probably symphobia ones :P we all have duplo songs named sunset haha or "insert feeling here"

3. yeah they're a bit weak aren't they - another reason why that song didn't work out :P

4. oh yeah, thats actually the 2nd drop but I just really like it (the first isn't electro funk either though so dont get you're hopes up) melodies from atomsfear dancing in outer space btw

5. ...olololol

thanks for listening man, outer space was probably the closest to being released tbh

[World War 3]

What's up?

- Why is the synth all quiet during the intro? You could've used filters instead.
- That hi hat's a bit too loud. Lower the volume of that.
- Change the pattern of the kick and snare every few measures to keep it not repetitive.
- That drop...is really weird. It sounds off-key to me.
- The volume randomly goes up and down in this track. What's with that?
- The outro ends a bit too abruptly.

DJRoBomb responds:

Thanks, check out my other songs! I didn't have alot of time to make this song, and the reason the volume kept going up and down was because I figured the volume was too low at the beginning and too high at the end

[The Saltwater Scourge]

Holla.

- Nice pirate-y melodies. Can't help but to feel that some of the melodies in the intro is off key.
- That transition to the drop comes a bit too soon.
- That bass and lead during is too loud.

Also, sorry in advance if this review is too short/simplified.

Isulf responds:

Daamn, I hear it Now XD
I'll try to fix that XD But the Off-Key thing is something i do on purpose :P