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[Super Simple DnB loop]

Hello!

Okay, first thing I noticed about this track is that the drums are very, very weak. That kick is almost non-existent, and I had to hear real carefully to hear it. Get a deeper/snappier, stronger kick and snare sound. As for the hi hats, make it play on every beat (or just a really fast pattern will do). Oh, and have some dynamics in the beat too (like, certain snare hits being quieter than the others).

I have hearing problems, and I'm not sure if you had a bass in this. Throw in a Reese bass, or maybe even a harsh, distorted/buzzy one.

I've got nothing to say about the melody, though.

As for other tips, keep listening to DnB tracks. There's plenty of DnB mixes over on YouTube. Have a listen to any of them, and find the similarities in them.

KuraiShinen responds:

Ah, hello and thanks for the comment! I'm glad to actually have people listen through my stuff and throw in a bit of critique as well as a rating~

But yes, I didn't really have any sort of bass, nor did I have enough bass knowledge, well. Music theory knowledge in general to properly make a bassline for this little demo, and used a mildly deep string in place of it. Which, apparently serves as a melody, but I have yet to figure it out.

'Sfor the drums, I suppose I'll try to smarten myself up with DnB listening and try to pick up some techniques and better samples for a later DnB track I might make.

[Fallout]

Hello!

- That intro is really atmospheric...
- Did you layer that snare? If no, you probably should...with something that has more low-end.
- Those strings shouldn't be playing the same thing as the keys/bells. Make them harmonize with them instead. Also, if you're gonna make them play on the off-beat, don't over complicate the pattern. It'll sound disoriented.
- When the wubs came in, the track feels desolate. Aaaand you should make the pad a bit quieter. And make the wubs...uh, wub more in time with the tempo.
- What's with that outro? You want to lower the pitch of the track? Do it with all the instruments, otherwise it'll just sound weird.

Oh and did you put in a bassline in there? Like a sub bass or anything? Because I can't seem to hear/feel it. Or maybe my hearing has gotten worse...

[Countdown]

Hey there!

- Yeah, about that beat...it's always better to avoid using the stock samples of any DAW.
- Those wobbles could use some low- and mid-end. Try EQing those frequencies.
- Oh, and what aCreator said about the choice of instruments thing.

8-BitCat responds:

I'll definitely try to find better samples and I guess you're right about those wobbles <.< Thanks for the advice ^.^ its always nice to hear what I can improve on

[Step in]

Thank God you're not a rapist. You could get in jail being one! (the term for someone who raps is a rapper)

- The beat in the intro is nice.
- That synth is way too loud. Try adding distortion rather than just increasing the volume.
- The melody at 1:44 is nice.
- I'm hearing a lot of ducking (the snare, notably) and clipping (the synths) in this track. Basically what that means is that your synths are loud. Very loud. Too loud. You get my point.

TL;DR
The track has a nice vibe, but you've got a lot of mixing problems.

jossospro responds:

story of my life.

[The Unforgiven]

Yoooo

- That reese-like bass is really buzzy. Go easy on the distortion.
- I feel like the flute is a bit too detuned.
- I love those drums and the general oriental feeling of the melodies. It's like 90's electro/techno meets folk and DnB.
- That riser could be a little bit quieter.

[JeeGee - Charged]

Eyyyy

- The noisy kick at the start is pretty nice. But I can't help but to feel like that kick sounds really generic.
- Sounds 8-bit like. Also, pretty epic.
- Go easy on the rise in volume.
- Them wobbles sound pretty weak. You should give them a boost in the lower to mid frequencies.
- Try varying the hi-hat and drum pattern.

[4L?]

Heyyyyyyyyy

- I feel like this track lacks a bassline. Or it has one, and it's buried deep in the lead synths.
- Throw in some sweeps or a crash cymbal during transitions. Makes the track sound less monotone.
- The drums are rly sad because they didn't get enough parts in the track. :(
- As for that "ey" vocal sample, try varying the rhythm every few beats or so.
- That outro feels too short. Try making it repeat one more time before ending it.

EnterPrize responds:

Ok!

[Fluxstyle - I fly away]

Hey man, you don't HAVE to upload every single track you make. If a certain track is being a pain in the ass, just put it off and work on it at a later date. And when I mean a later date, I mean whenever you feel like working on it. Don't force yourself.

Anyway...
- this track is more breakbeat than DnB...but they're more or less related so ignore this asdfasdfadf
- It's really soothing. And nice melodies, too. Sounds like something from The Sims 3.
- Try glitching that beat a bit more like you did earlier in the track. Don't over do it, though. Or you could try varying the beats slightly near the end (like removing the hats or kick).
- Give a few seconds worth of silence to let that last note ring a bit.

unknowngoth responds:

Wow, your review is surprisingly helpful. Like holy crap this is some constructive criticism right there man, damn.
As for the track itself, I really just couldn't work it out. I tried a million different melodies and instruments, and I just didn't get what I wanted to make. I still like the song, it's just a complete different song than what I wanted it to be.
As for your advice, I will certainly put that to good use. I'm glad someone can still see some points to improve, rather than just rage over it like me.

So yeah. Thanks man. You helped me out here. Glad you found it soothing (since I was kinda going for that) :D